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maggie may
 04 Jan 2012, 22:09 #138663 Reply To Post
If anyone would like to free will review my short story, A Time to Leave, I'd gladly reciprocate. I'm especially interested to know if the tense and pov changes work, and how they could be improved upon. Thanks, Maggie M.
Joe 90
 05 Jan 2012, 11:02 #138699 Reply To Post
Quote: maggie may, Wednesday, 4 Jan 2012 22:09
If anyone would like to free will review my short story, A Time to Leave, I'd gladly reciprocate. I'm especially interested to know if the tense and pov changes work, and how they could be improved upon. Thanks, Maggie M.


One done. Hope it helps.
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ciaranl
 05 Jan 2012, 11:05 #138700 Reply To Post
I'll have a go Maggie. Be delighted if you could take a look at 'What Happened To Bobby Roberts' for me. Cheers, Ciaran
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maggie may
 05 Jan 2012, 11:42 #138702 Reply To Post

One done. Hope it helps.


Thanks very much. I know what you mean. I'm trying out different things really. Is there a piece in particular you would like me to look at? MM
maggie may
 05 Jan 2012, 11:43 #138703 Reply To Post
Quote: ciaranl, Thursday, 5 Jan 2012 11:05
I'll have a go Maggie. Be delighted if you could take a look at 'What Happened To Bobby Roberts' for me. Cheers, Ciaran


Thanks Ciaran. Will get to yours later today. MM
Joe 90
 05 Jan 2012, 13:37 #138714 Reply To Post
Quote: maggie may, Thursday, 5 Jan 2012 11:42

One done. Hope it helps.


Thanks very much. I know what you mean. I'm trying out different things really. Is there a piece in particular you would like me to look at? MM


If you're willing, a look at my novel opening 'Swordsman of Calais' would be nice. But don't feel obliged.

Best wishes

Joe 90
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PERRY
 05 Jan 2012, 14:38 #138723 Reply To Post
Well, there's another for you, MM. Not sure how I've helped. There's not much to correct.
ciaranl
 05 Jan 2012, 17:17 #138740 Reply To Post
Quote: maggie may, Thursday, 5 Jan 2012 11:43
Quote: ciaranl, Thursday, 5 Jan 2012 11:05
I'll have a go Maggie. Be delighted if you could take a look at 'What Happened To Bobby Roberts' for me. Cheers, Ciaran


Thanks Ciaran. Will get to yours later today. MM


Just posted it up Maggie. Mine is 6500 words by comparison to your fairly short count so don't feel obliged to go through it with a fine tooth comb. A general impression will be enough. Best wishes,

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ciaranl
 06 Jan 2012, 08:19 #138791 Reply To Post
Quote: ciaranl, Thursday, 5 Jan 2012 17:17
Quote: maggie may, Thursday, 5 Jan 2012 11:43
Quote: ciaranl, Thursday, 5 Jan 2012 11:05
I'll have a go Maggie. Be delighted if you could take a look at 'What Happened To Bobby Roberts' for me. Cheers, Ciaran


Thanks Ciaran. Will get to yours later today. MM


Just posted it up Maggie. Mine is 6500 words by comparison to your fairly short count so don't feel obliged to go through it with a fine tooth comb. A general impression will be enough. Best wishes,



Thanks Maggie, much appreciated. I thought Hollow needed work but there is much to admire in it. Keep going. Ciaran

Time And Time Again
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