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If anyone would like to free will review my short story, A Time to Leave, I'd gladly reciprocate. I'm especially interested to know if the tense and pov changes work, and how they could be improved upon. Thanks, Maggie M.
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Quote: maggie may, Wednesday, 4 Jan 2012 22:09If anyone would like to free will review my short story, A Time to Leave, I'd gladly reciprocate. I'm especially interested to know if the tense and pov changes work, and how they could be improved upon. Thanks, Maggie M. One done. Hope it helps.
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ciaranl
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I'll have a go Maggie. Be delighted if you could take a look at 'What Happened To Bobby Roberts' for me. Cheers, Ciaran
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One done. Hope it helps.
Thanks very much. I know what you mean. I'm trying out different things really. Is there a piece in particular you would like me to look at? MM
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Quote: ciaranl, Thursday, 5 Jan 2012 11:05I'll have a go Maggie. Be delighted if you could take a look at 'What Happened To Bobby Roberts' for me. Cheers, Ciaran Thanks Ciaran. Will get to yours later today. MM
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Quote: maggie may, Thursday, 5 Jan 2012 11:42One done. Hope it helps. Thanks very much. I know what you mean. I'm trying out different things really. Is there a piece in particular you would like me to look at? MM
If you're willing, a look at my novel opening 'Swordsman of Calais' would be nice. But don't feel obliged.
Best wishes
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Well, there's another for you, MM. Not sure how I've helped. There's not much to correct.
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Quote: maggie may, Thursday, 5 Jan 2012 11:43Quote: ciaranl, Thursday, 5 Jan 2012 11:05I'll have a go Maggie. Be delighted if you could take a look at 'What Happened To Bobby Roberts' for me. Cheers, Ciaran Thanks Ciaran. Will get to yours later today. MM Just posted it up Maggie. Mine is 6500 words by comparison to your fairly short count so don't feel obliged to go through it with a fine tooth comb. A general impression will be enough. Best wishes,
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Quote: ciaranl, Thursday, 5 Jan 2012 17:17Quote: maggie may, Thursday, 5 Jan 2012 11:43Quote: ciaranl, Thursday, 5 Jan 2012 11:05I'll have a go Maggie. Be delighted if you could take a look at 'What Happened To Bobby Roberts' for me. Cheers, Ciaran Thanks Ciaran. Will get to yours later today. MM Just posted it up Maggie. Mine is 6500 words by comparison to your fairly short count so don't feel obliged to go through it with a fine tooth comb. A general impression will be enough. Best wishes, Thanks Maggie, much appreciated. I thought Hollow needed work but there is much to admire in it. Keep going. Ciaran
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