Quote: DanlTetley, Monday, 30 Jan 2012 14:54Can somebody give some example of how to 'show' the story in writing as opposed to 'telling'. This is something I am really struggling with, and it has been brought up by several people so it is an issue I desperately need to acknowledge.
The problem I have is that a large amount of my story is told through the third person and narrated as the main protagonist isnt in all of the chapters. I give her thoughts and narrative where I think its appropriate but its clearly not enough...help!
Danl
Telling — She was ugly.
Showing — I glanced at the woman and immediately turned my head away. That brief glance burned an image in my mind. An image I wouldn’t be able to shake for a long time. Her head sat atop her shoulders like a pumpkin left on the front porch for weeks after Halloween. The face carved in the middle still held some semblance of a demonic smile. I hope it wasn’t smiling at me.