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sulcus
 05 Mar 2010, 08:10 #83057 Reply To Post
Here's a 27 word story
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Temperance
 05 Mar 2010, 08:22 #83060 Reply To Post
I only get wallpaper; are the words hidden in the pattern?

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dancingsue
 05 Mar 2010, 09:27 #83064 Reply To Post
Does Melissa always talk bollocks?
the long and the short of it

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sulcus
 05 Mar 2010, 10:30 #83075 Reply To Post
Quote: Temperance, Friday, 5 Mar 2010 08:22
I only get wallpaper; are the words hidden in the pattern?

xT


No, it's the piece entitled 'Visual Literature'. I think the wallpaper you're referring to is the cover of my book!
"A,B&E", "Not In My Name" and "52FF" (flash fiction anthology) all available on Amazon Kindle

"How a psychopath makes sweet love. I can get you ringside. Royal box even."
Nestat
 05 Mar 2010, 11:26 #83084 Reply To Post
You've finally coerced us into reading an extract! Congratulations!

Now, why "abscissa" over "ordered pair"?
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sulcus
 05 Mar 2010, 11:45 #83091 Reply To Post
Quote: Nestat, Friday, 5 Mar 2010 11:26
You've finally coerced us into reading an extract! Congratulations!

Now, why "abscissa" over "ordered pair"?


Ha I knew the 27 words only would lure you over to the dark side!

Abscissa as both the x-co-ordinate line on a graph (coined by Descartes, "I think therefore I am" which is patently baloney), but also echoing it's original etymolgy of 'a cut' or 'an incision'.

And before I'm pulled up on it, it really doesn't matter if a reader doesn't get all those layers & meanings... It offers a spectrum of 'meaning' along which any reader can hopefully derive something.
This post was last edited by sulcus, 05 Mar 2010, 11:45
"A,B&E", "Not In My Name" and "52FF" (flash fiction anthology) all available on Amazon Kindle

"How a psychopath makes sweet love. I can get you ringside. Royal box even."
Joe 90
 05 Mar 2010, 11:46 #83092 Reply To Post
Quote: sulcus, Friday, 5 Mar 2010 11:45
Quote: Nestat, Friday, 5 Mar 2010 11:26
You've finally coerced us into reading an extract! Congratulations!

Now, why "abscissa" over "ordered pair"?


Ha I knew the 27 words only would lure you over to the dark side!

Abscissa as both the x-co-ordinate line on a graph (coined by Descartes, "I think therefore I am" which is patently baloney), but also echoing it's original etymolgy of 'a cut' or 'an incision'.

And before I'm pulled up on it, it really doesn't matter if a reader doesn't get all those layers & meanings... It offers a spectrum of 'meaning' along which any reader can hopefully derive something.


I had an abscissa under a tooth once, very painful.
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sulcus
 05 Mar 2010, 11:49 #83094 Reply To Post
Quote: Joe 90, Friday, 5 Mar 2010 11:46
Quote: sulcus, Friday, 5 Mar 2010 11:45
Quote: Nestat, Friday, 5 Mar 2010 11:26
You've finally coerced us into reading an extract! Congratulations!

Now, why "abscissa" over "ordered pair"?


Ha I knew the 27 words only would lure you over to the dark side!

Abscissa as both the x-co-ordinate line on a graph (coined by Descartes, "I think therefore I am" which is patently baloney), but also echoing it's original etymolgy of 'a cut' or 'an incision'.

And before I'm pulled up on it, it really doesn't matter if a reader doesn't get all those layers & meanings... It offers a spectrum of 'meaning' along which any reader can hopefully derive something.


I had an abscissa under a tooth once, very painful.


X-rated no doubt. You pun duellist/dualist you
"A,B&E", "Not In My Name" and "52FF" (flash fiction anthology) all available on Amazon Kindle

"How a psychopath makes sweet love. I can get you ringside. Royal box even."
AntCity
 05 Mar 2010, 12:58 #83101 Reply To Post
Well, I suppose it is a story but to me it feels more like opening lines for something longer or, alternatively, a poem.

I suppose that fewer words allow you to reach the low attention span masses out there, clamouring for something to read, but next you will be using words with three or less letters. sulcus, you risk going commercial.

If you continue to write like this who will use the far reaches of the English language? Who will stop those obscure units of meaning (had to use my Thesaurus for that) from fading into not even memory?

The milkman, the pub, the Church of England, the Post Office, the telephone with a dial on it, the corner shop, British Leyland, the pound note, bread sauce at Christmas, El Dorado, BBC 6 Music on DAB, the Empire, the coal and steel industry, the wooden walls of England, the thin red line and trust in the police. If you, sulcus, do not keep writing in your usual style my dictionary will be on this list.


sulcus
 05 Mar 2010, 13:07 #83103 Reply To Post
Quote: AntCity, Friday, 5 Mar 2010 12:58
Well, I suppose it is a story but to me it feels more like opening lines for something longer or, alternatively, a poem.

I suppose that fewer words allow you to reach the low attention span masses out there, clamouring for something to read, but next you will be using words with three or less letters. sulcus, you risk going commercial.

If you continue to write like this who will use the far reaches of the English language? Who will stop those obscure units of meaning (had to use my Thesaurus for that) from fading into not even memory?

The milkman, the pub, the Church of England, the Post Office, the telephone with a dial on it, the corner shop, British Leyland, the pound note, bread sauce at Christmas, El Dorado, BBC 6 Music on DAB, the Empire, the coal and steel industry, the wooden walls of England, the thin red line and trust in the police. If you, sulcus, do not keep writing in your usual style my dictionary will be on this list.




see 'abscissa' above to put your mind at rest
"A,B&E", "Not In My Name" and "52FF" (flash fiction anthology) all available on Amazon Kindle

"How a psychopath makes sweet love. I can get you ringside. Royal box even."
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