Title : Shalimar
Author : Toscka
Genre : General Fiction
Review By: Sapper
Shalimar by Toscka An intriguing tale which kept my attention, distracted a little by not knowing or having a hint of what the cocaine powder was doing in Max's luggage. I know its just an excerpt but this reader would have liked a hint - or something. Nevertheless the story unfolded at a reasonable rate helped by the good descriptions of India, both urban and rural. A couple of queries: the sentence 'A last suitcase gamboled onto the carousel . . .; its owner pounced' I would describe that as an 'awkward' sentence. There are various ways it could be written which I'll leave for your consideration. Also:
'You, all right, mate' No need for the commas. Have given mainly fives and commend an story with intrigue. Sapper

Synopsis
Shalimar, a luxury resort with a dark secret. Max, a cynical, dissolute travel journalist, flies to India to write a brochure on a tropical five star spa. Shalimar is outwardly a paradise, a resort of wind ruffled palms and indolent leisure, outwardly anyway...
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