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I have read the two previous versions of this story, but this version is the strongest. Changing from the third person to the first person gave the story a new feel and added to the tension. Nate is a strong character and I wish him well in the coming chapters. Perhaps a romance with Cat? Love the name, by the way! A good read through and through! All the best--clf
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Nom, If I might chime in with a "WELL DONE!" of my own. There are a few YWO participants I think we all can use as role models and you are most definitely one of them. From your complete and thoughtful reviews of other peoples' work to the meticulous and sometimes fearless crafting and recrafting of your own, you are a gosh darned guiding light, blast you. You may regard this as my free will review of "God of Trees". Still waiting for Little Joe to appear, or maybe Hop Sing, but you do what you think is best. Best, Alan Sketches by Plumboz
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Anna Hunt
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Quote: plumboz, Tuesday, 28 Aug 2007 15:15Nom, If I might chime in with a "WELL DONE!" of my own. There are a few YWO participants I think we all can use as role models and you are most definitely one of them. From your complete and thoughtful reviews of other peoples' work to the meticulous and sometimes fearless crafting and recrafting of your own, you are a gosh darned guiding light, blast you. You may regard this as my free will review of "God of Trees". Still waiting for Little Joe to appear, or maybe Hop Sing, but you do what you think is best. Best, Alan Sketches by Plumboz
I'd have to third that too. Timber's review gave me the info I needed to properly evaluate my first 3 chapters. He was not enraptured by them (in any sense) but explained where the problems were and gave pointers on how to improve. YWO is my only 'writers group' of any sort and without critiques like his I would have continued in my usual blissful ignorance. It has been fun to move Timber from, er well, ahem (re)marks, to comments that show me I am moving in the right direction. As for you Plum, I have never been assigned your work, don't know you from Adam (am reading up about clichés), but you too are most definitely a guiding light. Gosh this message board would have ignited if it weren't for you. P.S. Anyone wanna borrow some matches?
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Quote: Anna Hunt, Tuesday, 28 Aug 2007 15:53As for you Plum, I have never been assigned your work, don't know you from Adam (am reading up about clichés), but you too are most definitely a guiding light. Gosh this message board would have ignited if it weren't for you. P.S. Anyone wanna borrow some matches?  Anna, I have it on good authority that the best way to get to know an author (there, I said it, "author") is to buy one of his or her books.  Reading it, while optional, helps too!  As a further incentive, you would have the confidence of knowing that you have invested in a certifiably rare commodity. Now I suppose I had better do some Hug Proctor patrolling Best, Alan Ye Olde Web Site
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 Gawrsh.  I am touched.... Now break it up folks. Don't you have masterpieces to pen. Hmmm?
Best, Norm Forestry combines art and science, grapples with the ecological riddles of our time, but it's also a job. That's what I write about.
Timberati To everything blog, blog, blog
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Quote: plumboz, Tuesday, 28 Aug 2007 15:59I have it on good authority that the best way to get to know an author (there, I said it, "author") is to buy one of his or her books.  Reading it, while optional, helps too!  Hurry, hurry, hurry, they're going fast. Buy one now!. I own one myself. Still waiting on an autograph. One of these days I'll make it out to Phoenix.
Best, Norm Forestry combines art and science, grapples with the ecological riddles of our time, but it's also a job. That's what I write about.
Timberati To everything blog, blog, blog
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Anna Hunt
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Quote: plumboz, Tuesday, 28 Aug 2007 15:59 Anna,
I have it on good authority that the best way to get to know an author (there, I said it, "author") is to buy one of his or her books. Reading it, while optional, helps too! 
As a further incentive, you would have the confidence of knowing that you have invested in a certifiably rare commodity.
Now I suppose I had better do some Hug Proctor patrolling
Best, Alan
Ye Olde Web Site[/quoteI have saved my pennies because I wish to acquire a dragon for my daughter for Christmas - get that m/s finished spotty -  and an action thriller for my husband - keep up the good work Timber, I was planning on Christmas 2007 not 2008.  So, Plum, I will look around to see which of my unsuspecting relatives would like your gems. Got anything suitable for a granny?
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I have saved my pennies because I wish to acquire a dragon for my daughter for Christmas - get that m/s finished spotty -  and an action thriller for my husband - keep up the good work Timber, I was planning on Christmas 2007 not 2008.  So, Plum, I will look around to see which of my unsuspecting relatives would like your gems. Got anything suitable for a granny?
Anna,
The woman who read "Close Enough for Government Work" for the audio recording for the Arizona Library for the Blind qualifies as a granny (70 something and with actual grandkids) and she told me she had a hoot reading my sometimes mildly naughty prose. And from what I have seen on the bookshelves and even here on YWO, what I thought was pushing the envelope when I wrote it is very definitely mild.
But back to Norm.............
Yeah, finish up God o' the Trees. We need a thriller fix!
Alan
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Quote: plumboz, Tuesday, 28 Aug 2007 18:51 Got anything suitable for a granny? Anna, The woman who read "Close Enough for Government Work" for the audio recording for the Arizona Library for the Blind qualifies as a granny (70 something and with actual grandkids) and she told me she had a hoot reading my sometimes mildly naughty prose. And from what I have seen on the bookshelves and even here on YWO, what I thought was pushing the envelope when I wrote it is very definitely mild. But back to Norm............. Yeah, finish up God o' the Trees. We need a thriller fix! Alan Ye Olde Web Site
Audio Book? Well, why didn't you say?
I collect audio books for my bedtime stories. Needs to be mildly amusing (I mustn't get excited) or boring or have some other sleep inducing qualities. If it's on Amazon my children know which buttons to press. They'll be pleased to have their shopping sorted for them.
smiley of "tongue" - could not find one for "in cheek."
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