Title : Spinebender-Unleashed

Author : Trevor Saull-Hunt

Genre : Horror, Thriller


Review Extract from Review By: elainejohns

Spinebender-Unleashed
Your writing is very competent and the plot was exciting. The way you built the tension using short sentences to almost make your reader breathless was exhilirating and moved the pace of the plot well. This was particularly effective in the second paragraph and the language and descriptive imagery in this paragraph was also excellent e.g. I really enjoyed: "Her body tensed as the cold air caressed her skin, creeping over her flesh like icy fingers." The paragraph below this that begins: "Darren," she called quietly." had some effective imagery also: "She blinked, staring into the black void, trying to fend off the feeling that was eating through her body. Eating through her body was really primordial for me - great stuff and the alliteration: fend off the feeling brought attention to that piece.

This was a sophisticated piece of writing and you found new ways of saying things that refused to resort to cliche - that's why I was brought up a little sharply when you did indulge in a cliche (on 2nd page of 16) "Something moved in the shadows against the wall. . . made her 'heart miss a beat.' This looked out of place as your writing is quite original and this well worn phrase jarred a little. This is only a small thing and I hate to mention it in such an excellent piece! The only other thing I did think was that in Chapter 2 you have two characters with the same first name. There is Andrew Davis the Chief Constable and Superintendant Andrew Philips - again this is a bit of a 'nitpicking point' but it is sometimes confusing for readers to have the same names to contend with in different characters - even if they have different jobs and are well delineated.

Overall, I found your work gripping and at times breathtaking, especially the cliffhanger of tension that you finished Chapter 3 on. Congratulations and I wish you luck with it. I really enjoyed reading such a good piece of writing.

Synopsis
The follow up to Spinebender. Darker and hopefully more chilling. People are being slaughtered and the police don't have an answer. Psychologist, Hazel Stone, is asked to be part of the team to end the nightmare, but she has no idea what she's getting herself into.
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