Title : Run to Me

Author : Erin Golding

Genre : General Fiction

Review Extract from Review By: ljrobbo

Run to Me

I was completely drawn in to your main character in the prologue. The sense of 'looming changes' due to them declaring their love and the fact that he is leaving/maybe unfaithful is well drawn.

The use of the two narrative voices in first person gives a pacy structure and you use dialogue effectively to show the backstory rather than simple telling it.

I think that the school setting will appeal to teenagers, particularly boys who have fancied the odd teacher! As a teacher myself I did find the way that Abby approaches her first day in a new job difficult to stomach (in my experience she would have visited her classroom several times to prepare it for her pupils and would certainly have turned up much earlier on her first day and not have expected to be home by four - sorry me being pedantic but if you want it to be realistic it might be worth talking to a teacher).
The story line is developing well - I like the way that you use nuances and glances to slowly build the relationship.
I would like to read on as there have to be a lot of pitfalls ahead of both of them if things develop further.

You do need to check punctuation (overuse of and layout but please keep writing

Synopsis
What if falling in love with the wrong person set you free?
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