Title : My House Eats People - new edit

Read Feed: "When the phone rang, I hardly noticed at first. Later I wished I’d shouted “Fire!”, or tied my parents to their chairs or something. Anything to stop that call being answered. "

Author : Katherine McKay

Genre : Children's Fiction, Fantasy, Teenage Fiction

Marvellous stuff!

It is a fabulously written story and I could not find fault with your language or gramma at all.

The pace of the story is brilliant.Especially just after the phonecall when you have him leave the house after the homework - this is such a clasic way a boy of 11 would probably act and it is really funny.

Your characters a fantastic too. You really keep the brother sister love hate relationship going throughout everything that happens which makes it funnier and also more believable.

I have to say, the thing I liked the most about it was the narrative voice you have used. Small details (like him describing himself as the king of biscuits) or the policeman bit (It started okay. The desk sergeant didn’t say “Ello, ello, ello,” like a policeman in a book, but he did say “What’s all this then?” which wasn’t bad.) are great and made me laugh out loud- it really gave the impression that he is an 11 year old kid and even though everything is strange and stressful, he is still thinking as a kid that age would.
His tone is very funny and the dialogue is marvellous throughout.

My only minor issue with the story is that the children don't just go into the parents bedroom at the start - surely they would just go up there and look for their mother?

All in all I thought this was a brilliantly written story. It engaged me immediately and just got better and better. It was funny and quirky and you have mastered the art of suspense and gripping the reader.

I just wish I had more of it to read...

Synopsis
Jake's mum walks upstairs one Monday morning and doesn't come back down...next day his dad vanishes too.

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thank you so much Alex! That has really cheered up a grey Monday