Quote: robgilmour, Tuesday, 7 Feb 2012 10:43Quote: rosefitzrobert, Saturday, 4 Feb 2012 04:51You have no idea. You've put your finger on what was bothering me - the prose is lifeless, and your suggestions are a shot in the arm. I was sitting here drooping over my computer, staring at the same paragraphs again and again, moving the sentences around until I couldn't see straight.

thank you for highlighting a Krademacher review - always informative. (note I haven't used 'was' once!)
Rob
Yeah, I'll never look at "was" the same way again.
On another thread we've been talking about writing goals for the New Year. I decided that one of mine is to try to write every review I do as if i were krademacher. A lofty goal, I know, but nothing ventured, nothing gained.
This post was last edited by rosefitzrobert, 07 Feb 2012, 14:33