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emma mahony
 02 Jul 2009, 12:36 #63385 Reply To Post
Quote: unclearthur, Wednesday, 1 Jul 2009 22:20
Personally, I'd lose the comma after 'In a far corner'. It slows things up without any real need. Depends on the pace of the rest of the paragraph, though.

Jonathan


I'm inclined to agree! many thanks
pam123writing
 02 Jul 2009, 12:37 #63386 Reply To Post
Emma are we getting any "Nine Lives" up to read now it's finished?
"And, in the end, the love you take / Is equal to the love you make." Lennon and McCartney 1969
emma mahony
 02 Jul 2009, 12:39 #63387 Reply To Post
Quote: pam123writing, Thursday, 2 Jul 2009 12:37
Emma are we getting any "Nine Lives" up to read now it's finished?


Yup - just have to make sure there are no typos or grammatical errors.
pam123writing
 02 Jul 2009, 13:16 #63391 Reply To Post
Quote: emma mahony, Thursday, 2 Jul 2009 12:39
Quote: pam123writing, Thursday, 2 Jul 2009 12:37
Emma are we getting any "Nine Lives" up to read now it's finished?


Yup - just have to make sure there are no typos or grammatical errors.


That's good. I hope I get it this time around. I'll have to FW if not, but I'll hang fire for a while, see if it pops into my assignments. It's just so nice to see you back with us. There are a lot of strangers about these days. Good luck with it.
"And, in the end, the love you take / Is equal to the love you make." Lennon and McCartney 1969
Brian Hamilton-Smith
 02 Jul 2009, 14:08 #63396 Reply To Post
Quote: pam123writing, Thursday, 2 Jul 2009 13:16
Quote: emma mahony, Thursday, 2 Jul 2009 12:39
Quote: pam123writing, Thursday, 2 Jul 2009 12:37
Emma are we getting any "Nine Lives" up to read now it's finished?


Yup - just have to make sure there are no typos or grammatical errors.


That's good. I hope I get it this time around. I'll have to FW if not, but I'll hang fire for a while, see if it pops into my assignments. It's just so nice to see you back with us. There are a lot of strangers about these days. Good luck with it.


Hi Pam.

I'm currently assigned your book Three Steps to Heaven. I'm making an awful lot of notes, and I'll email them to you. One thing is for certain - you don't understand comma use any more than you do hyphenation!

Sites like YWO are lovely support groups where amateur writers can help eachother, but there comes a time, if publication by any other route than a vanity press concern like Legend is going to be more than a pipedream, when writers need advice from people who know what they are talking about. 'The blind leading the blind' is an expression that comes to mind.

Here's a line, picked at random from many, that you might want to look at:

She sat down opposite him, flicking her long hair over her shoulders and removed her scarf and gloves.

This post was last edited by Brian Hamilton-Smith, 02 Jul 2009, 14:17
unclearthur
 02 Jul 2009, 22:59 #63444 Reply To Post
Quote: emma mahony, Thursday, 2 Jul 2009 12:36
Quote: unclearthur, Wednesday, 1 Jul 2009 22:20
Personally, I'd lose the comma after 'In a far corner'. It slows things up without any real need. Depends on the pace of the rest of the paragraph, though.

Jonathan


I'm inclined to agree! many thanks


Wow! Someone agreed with my puctuation!
Thanks Emma.

Jonathan


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emma mahony
 03 Jul 2009, 15:30 #63511 Reply To Post
Hi Pam.

I'm currently assigned your book Three Steps to Heaven. I'm making an awful lot of notes, and I'll email them to you. One thing is for certain - you don't understand comma use any more than you do hyphenation!

Sites like YWO are lovely support groups where amateur writers can help eachother, but there comes a time, if publication by any other route than a vanity press concern like Legend is going to be more than a pipedream, when writers need advice from people who know what they are talking about. 'The blind leading the blind' is an expression that comes to mind.

Here's a line, picked at random from many, that you might want to look at:

She sat down opposite him, flicking her long hair over her shoulders and removed her scarf and gloves.



Hi Brian,

Us amateurs are very lucky to have you in our little support group!

Emma
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