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Anyone available to free will my short story Mortal Wound?
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Turnip
 01 Sep 2010, 11:34 #97796 Reply To Post
I have a strange little short story that I have to get into shape for an Irish anthology. It retells a short tale of classic Irish folklore with two frequently alternating viewpoints. The language is meant to be archaic as the setting is pre-Christianity. I'm committed to the style of narration but I really need some extra eyes to look over the language etc. If it helps I can share the original folklore but that will spoil the first reading.
If anybody fancies taking a look, I'd be happy to reciprocate with a free will of short story or novel chapters.
Cheers
Turnip

Mortal Wound - Irish folklore retold
This post was last edited by Turnip, 01 Sep 2010, 11:36
Back to my roots.
MLT
 01 Sep 2010, 14:02 #97806 Reply To Post
Quote: Turnip, Wednesday, 1 Sep 2010 11:34
I have a strange little short story that I have to get into shape for an Irish anthology. It retells a short tale of classic Irish folklore with two frequently alternating viewpoints. The language is meant to be archaic as the setting is pre-Christianity. I'm committed to the style of narration but I really need some extra eyes to look over the language etc. If it helps I can share the original folklore but that will spoil the first reading.
If anybody fancies taking a look, I'd be happy to reciprocate with a free will of short story or novel chapters.
Cheers
Turnip

Mortal Wound - Irish folklore retold


I'll try to have a look at it this afternoon.

Please do not reciprocate at the moment. I am currently revising the two books that I have uploaded. They are only there to avoid accusations of reviewing without having work posted.

Turnip
 01 Sep 2010, 14:11 #97807 Reply To Post
Thanks Marjorie. Just let me know when you're ready for the return,
Back to my roots.
sarsen
 01 Sep 2010, 16:22 #97810 Reply To Post
Just posted a review, but time only for one read-through.
Harry

blog: http://1513fusion.wordpress.com/
Turnip
 01 Sep 2010, 16:45 #97811 Reply To Post
Quote: sarsen, Wednesday, 1 Sep 2010 16:22
Just posted a review, but time only for one read-through.
Harry



Many thanks Harry. Much appreciated.
Back to my roots.
MLT
 01 Sep 2010, 16:48 #97813 Reply To Post
Done and posted. I hoped it is some help.

Marjorie
Turnip
 01 Sep 2010, 17:29 #97815 Reply To Post
Quote: MLT, Wednesday, 1 Sep 2010 16:48
Done and posted. I hoped it is some help.

Marjorie


Excellent Marjorie, very helpful. I always have colon trouble. I'll be taking up the suggestions from yourself and Harry above.
The blades and severing and tied to pillar and stuff are all images from the legend. I could explain here but don't want to spoil it in case of other readers.

so, if you're interested: from p339 on
Back to my roots.
Turnip
 01 Sep 2010, 18:11 #97817 Reply To Post
Quote: Turnip, Wednesday, 1 Sep 2010 16:45
Quote: sarsen, Wednesday, 1 Sep 2010 16:22
Just posted a review, but time only for one read-through.
Harry



Many thanks Harry. Much appreciated.


Harry, would you like a freewill of 1513?
Back to my roots.
MLT
 01 Sep 2010, 18:15 #97818 Reply To Post
Quote: Turnip, Wednesday, 1 Sep 2010 17:29
Quote: MLT, Wednesday, 1 Sep 2010 16:48
Done and posted. I hoped it is some help.

Marjorie


Excellent Marjorie, very helpful. I always have colon trouble. I'll be taking up the suggestions from yourself and Harry above.
The blades and severing and tied to pillar and stuff are all images from the legend. I could explain here but don't want to spoil it in case of other readers.

so, if you're interested: from p339 on


It certainly makes more sense when you read the legend. But can you be sure that readers of the anthology will be familiar with the legend? It must be possible to clarify it a bit without labouring the point. However, it is your story and I wish you well with it.

sarsen
 01 Sep 2010, 22:06 #97828 Reply To Post
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Harry, would you like a freewill of 1513?


I've just uploaded a 2000 word short story, 'Strands of Copper'. It has not been seen here. A critique of that would be of interest.

But you can look at the historical novel 1513 if you prefer. (It is much longer)

Thanks

Harry

blog: http://1513fusion.wordpress.com/
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