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Ais
 14 Jun 2009, 13:24 #61420
Will be sure to do so - perhaps it is already working though, after all this story has had three FWRs which is three more than any of the others got.
Work as if you live in the early days of a better nation - Alasdair Gray
fudgefase
 14 Jun 2009, 13:57 #61425
And there was me thinking we were just making it up as we went along, like me.....
Happy Christmas poppets!
Ais
 14 Jun 2009, 16:37 #61443
Well, we were really, just seems to have adapted into some fun...with fringe benefits
Work as if you live in the early days of a better nation - Alasdair Gray
fudgefase
 14 Jun 2009, 17:16 #61448
I see. How's this then....

"Twenty years ago I was at the height of my fame and possibly of my powers.
If you moved in the right circles, my reputation was second to none, and my ability to get the job done, any job, was legend.
As Shamenoutre went, there were almost none who could touch me, perhaps one or two who could equal me, but I had the arrogance of youth, and I was more daring that the others.
With that arrogance came pride and I began to lean heavily on my powers to achieve what I wanted to achieve and get me into – and out of – any given situation.
I moved in the darkness so often I practically lived there. I used its power constantly.
I took on job after job; sometimes finding a lost soul, but more often, as I charged more and more for my services, and the people who could afford me tended to be of the less moral variety, getting rid of a rival or frightening someone into leaving a line of business became almost a stock in trade..
I used binding rites to stop people making decisions that would allow them to move on with their lives. Sometimes I just watched them die. Sometimes, more than occasionally, I confess, my role in their demise was more active.
When Loeb first came calling I was flattered. There was no fear in me at the time. There was little could shake my confidence.
So when this elegant and obviously ethereal stranger introduced himself to me (on my way back to my penthouse from a binding job, and half-in the dark) I was intrigued.
He had a very special job for me (you’d be surprised how often I heard THAT line – everyone thinks THEIR job is special) one that only I could do for him.
He wanted me to fetch someone out of Hell.
Even I smiled at that.
Hell?
I wasn’t even convinced I believed in Hell, but he was quite adamant. He stroked my ego in the right places.
Only I was strong enough; only I was insightful enough.
In reality, only I would have been arrogant enough to even try.
I was dubious about the job, but allowed him to talk me into it, not that I needed too much persuasion. Part of me – a big part of me – wanted to know if I could do it. I wanted to take on death and best it.
I asked him where we needed to go, and he told me that I’d need to rest up first and gather my strength a bit. Even I had to concede that using so much power regularly was starting to wear me out.
He smiled that thoughtful smile – the one that never, ever reached his eyes, and he said that now I was ‘on board’, he’d come back and get me nearer the time.
Apparently the ‘target’ wasn’t actually dead yet. I laughed at that, and said I could fix that too if he wanted.
Loeb looked at me with a solemn expression and I saw a flicker of colour cross his eyes, but just for an instant. Then he laughed with me.
“That won’t be necessary. It’ll be very soon though. In the next couple of days at the latest. Please keep yourself free for my call.”
“By the way Loeb,” I said. “You have never really told me what’s in it for me….”
This time he turned and looked at me full on, and there was no humour in his face whatsoever.
“Power,” he said. “More power than you can ever imagine coursing through your veins. You will feel what it is like to be a God.”
My eyebrows shot into my hairline, but he disappeared out the door and it banged shut behind him.
“Deal.” I said to the thin air."
Happy Christmas poppets!
Ais
 14 Jun 2009, 19:25 #61470
More Loeb - yay! The story definitely intrigues...
Work as if you live in the early days of a better nation - Alasdair Gray
Ais
 16 Jun 2009, 12:15 #61661
This will probably baffle all except any Ghost in the Shell fans - anyway, here goes...

[Major! What’s your status?]

Major Kusanagi focused inward while driving across the Nihama bridge. Aramaki’s cyber-link image waited there for her to answer.

[On my way to follow an extra lead I found on the Minister’s kidnap attempt yesterday, sir.]

[Nihama District, eh? That will have to wait for now – I have a priority one case that needs immediate attention. As of twelve minutes ago an anonymous message was received concerning a number of writers on the web who seem to have been ghost-hacked more than four days ago.]

She frowned, keeping the expression internal. Beside her, Togusa unaware that she was talking to the old man, had no clue even that she was concerned.

[Hacking a website’s members - what do they hope to gain? Propaganda generation for a new political faction?]

[Unknown, Major. I am sending you the information we have on the victims. I want you to investigate and get those responsible. I am putting the rest of Section-9 at your disposal.]

[Understood.] Putting her foot down hard on the accelerator, she swerved out of the orderly flow of morning traffic, causing Togusa to look up, startled from his thoughts.

[Batou – I want Section-9 mobile immediately. Full load-out!]

Togusa’s eyes narrowed, having received the cyber call along with the rest. Like them, he was instantly alert.

[Already ahead of you, Major.] Batou’s stern image gave the slightest of smiles. [The old Man gave us a head-start. See you at the end of the bridge.]

Then she saw him, stood recklessly in the open doorway of the Section-9 VTOL, swooping in alongside them across Osaka Bay.

[So what’ve we got, Major?] Batou’s voice continued through the cyber-link, it’s gravelly yet casual tone giving no hint of effort against the wind whipping past him, trying to pull him out before dropping him a hundred metres down into the sea.

[Web-borne ghost-hacks. We’ve got some writers who need unblocking.]

[Hah! Makes a change from shooting it out with Web-Yakuza I suppose.]

[It will give you a chance to brush up on your prose – we’re going in undercover.]

[Yeah – just as long as I don’t get Chick-lit...]

With my deepest apologies to Shirow Masamune and all the Ghost in the Shell team(s).
Work as if you live in the early days of a better nation - Alasdair Gray
fudgefase
 16 Jun 2009, 13:24 #61665


First the web site - next the world.....
After that, all the other worlds too....
Happy Christmas poppets!
Ais
 16 Jun 2009, 13:30 #61666
Oh yes...wasn't that the plan after all?

It's okay, I'll stop writing Japanese inspired stuff now.
Work as if you live in the early days of a better nation - Alasdair Gray
Saxon Annie
 16 Jun 2009, 18:05 #61726
Quote: Ais, Tuesday, 16 Jun 2009 13:30
Oh yes...wasn't that the plan after all?

It's okay, I'll stop writing Japanese inspired stuff now.


I didn't understand all of it, having not read the material that inspired you but I got the gist of the story and the tongue in cheek drama and I loved it.
It's inspiring to visit this thread when bogged down with missing reviews , reviews with a below average mark , spiteful threads and general despondancy of a market being squeezed by the credit crunch:omg:. It reminds me of what creative writing can do whether it is intended for the public eye or not. It lifts the spirits.
We really must ask Ted to make this a regular subject on its own. 'Try out your own creative anecdotes,' for down in the mouth and down at heel fellow unpublished authors.
Keep it up boys, one day I might feel confident enough to have a go myself.
Ais
 16 Jun 2009, 18:15 #61729
Ahh, g'waan, have a go, y'will y'will, y'will...

Some good points there Saxon Annie and it is a fun idea that our very own Sulcus has gifted us with - like I keep saying, a Knighthood should be awarded, (though with better plate armour.)

A good reminder indeed - thanks.

Next story will be less 'specialised', I promise.
Work as if you live in the early days of a better nation - Alasdair Gray
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