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Thank you Andrew A for your very graceful review of "Finding Justice"
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nhemyers
 09 Feb 2012, 13:53 #141462 Reply To Post
I thought I'd post this graceful review from the very graceful and well-mannered Andrew A for everyone to see.

I think the point of reviews is to help and build up not to destroy. In any event I would suggest Andrew read two books: BEAUTY QUEENS by New York Times bestselling author Libba Bray and PIECES OF MY SISTER'S LIFE by Elizabeth Joy Arnold. Particularly in the first you will find the author spending time and pages telling the reader what to expect. This book is one of the ten best books for YA for 2011.

Incidentally Andrew, I did try to correct the words before they were uploaded however the site froze and after spending forever to get nowhere I went ahead and uploaded them. And Andrew, dialogue is how people speak, which is not always gramatically correct. I like to think the dialogue is authentic and however poorly rated, should remain that way. Language exists outside of Standard British English.

I did not know that YWO belongs to you so that you decide who goes and who stays. We have been told good manners and grace cost nothing. Is it rather too costly for you to exercise? If so I'm terribly sorry and I apologize on your behalf.

Review By: Andrew A

No Justice in this

Not a good start – ‘exerpt’ – excerpt. ‘significane’ – significance. Also, when have you ever purchased a book where the author has to explain their work before you can make sense of the story? Why should anyone reading this extract take it seriously? The entire opening of this posting is complete twaddle. The author destroys any chance of receiving a decent review by this unfathomable preamble. Worse still, they followed it with a song and then a prologue! Worse than that, the author could not even be bothered to check their spelling, grammar and punctuation.

Having read this piece, I can find no redeemable features. The dialogue is so steeped in the vernacular, it is unreadable. The only advice I can give the author is to stop wasting our time and remove this rubbish from the site!

This post was last edited by nhemyers, 09 Feb 2012, 13:56
CaroleH
 09 Feb 2012, 14:49 #141464 Reply To Post
Ever read 'Trainspotting'? Written entirely in thick Glaswegian vernacular. Yet strangely successful......

Well, actually that would be Edinburgh vernacular, but y'know, it's Scottish, and still impenetrable (but strangely good).
This post was last edited by CaroleH, 09 Feb 2012, 14:53
louheneghan
 09 Feb 2012, 15:18 #141467 Reply To Post
Ouch!
nhemyers
 09 Feb 2012, 16:54 #141475 Reply To Post
Thanks , Carole. Remember that movie with the female boxer starring none less than Clint Eastwood? There was I think Welsh dialect, Gaelic? That movie is still being shown, still being watched on US cable TV.

Perhaps dear Andrew can take some of his own advice and read more or widen his variety.
carola
 09 Feb 2012, 17:46 #141944 Reply To Post
He's already been reported to Ted twice this week.
'He who learns from one who is learning, drinks from a flowing river.' Proverb.
fxs60
 09 Feb 2012, 18:12 #142447 Reply To Post
Andrew has a particular aversion to 'vernacular'. Only Queenie English will do, it seems.
Self-expression is self-expression, rather than self-expression
nhemyers
 09 Feb 2012, 18:19 #142449 Reply To Post
Quote: nhemyers, Thursday, 9 Feb 2012 16:54
Thanks , Carole. Remember that movie with the female boxer starring none less than Clint Eastwood? There was I think Welsh dialect, Gaelic? That movie is still being shown, still being watched on US cable TV.

Perhaps dear Andrew can take some of his own advice and read more or widen his variety.



Dear Andrew,
I will not criticize,
Even when you have a dead man
Who'd see - except for missing eyes
I do think
you took author's "license"
when you chose so to write,
And many will think that's fine
though bye the bye, Andrew
I do think a dead man
loses his sight when he dies
And it matters little
Whether he has his eyes
And to conclude this little poem of mine
May your reviews reap high fives
May you become a bestseller
because many persons gave their time
Since you joined in 2006
To give your writing that very necessary fix
And since you are now at number twenty
I think they gave you plenty!

Please, Lord,
He wants to get to number one
May his reviewers be generous and fair
So in two shakes of a lamb's tail,
Their reviews get him there.
nhemyers
 09 Feb 2012, 18:50 #142451 Reply To Post
Quote: louheneghan, Thursday, 9 Feb 2012 15:18
Ouch!


I just found it Carole. It's *Million Dollar Baby* and it won 4 Academy awards, no less. Not many films achieve that.

I don't get it. Andrew speaks about my grammar then goes right ahead and refers to me, a singular author, as "they" and "their" in the same sentence. I thought that would be s/he and her/ his depending on the gender he assigns me. Hope I managed to get my grammar and spelling right in these posts. Not to worry, Andrew is generous with his corrections.
CaroleH
 09 Feb 2012, 22:53 #142474 Reply To Post
I've not seen Million Dollar Baby, but The Color Purple would be another famous one.......
ZeBeDee
 10 Feb 2012, 01:18 #142479 Reply To Post
Quote: nhemyers, Thursday, 9 Feb 2012 16:54
Thanks , Carole. Remember that movie with the female boxer starring none less than Clint Eastwood? There was I think Welsh dialect, Gaelic? That movie is still being shown, still being watched on US cable TV.

Perhaps dear Andrew can take some of his own advice and read more or widen his variety.


Welsh? It was fockin' oirish, so it was.
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